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Practising anatomy.

I'm gonna draw a ton of different poses. I'm starting out with easy ones till I get all proportions right.

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~PunchSydeiron May 20, 2012 Hobbyist Filmographer

Looks pretty good, mya. :3
However, you might want to change te posing of Bianca's right arm, but that's just me.

=Nayume May 17, 2012

_{Oh my, this is pretty amazing, I love it! I'm horrible with anatomy I think you're doing great!}

*Amai--Kiss May 17, 2012 Hobbyist Digital Artist

Thank you. ; o ;

~spiralmaestro May 17, 2012

awesome!

~keiko-chan13 May 17, 2012 Student Artist

Very good ! What I'd say you could improve on is the arms are a bit too short, and the hands are a bit too big ~ And it seems like you're going for anime proportions but just so you know for realistic proportions, the neck would be much larger c;

~~And they kinda sorta of kankles SORRYYYYYYY~~

~Nekoseznya May 17, 2012 Hobbyist Traditional Artist

RIGHT THEN.

Next part.

About the girl on our right.

HER right arm, the curve? It almost intersects with the lineart of her upper arm. Make it much shorter. You do that a lot, actually - pay attention to it~ Just do that with your own arm, and look at how far that little wrinkle goes.

Forearms. Need to be longer. Looks a bit awkward. Also, arms can get really skinny around the wrist, even though she's wearing gloves, it should be a bit visible.

Also, you might want to erase the lineart of the shoulder by the bow, unless that bow is translucent!

Her left hand. It's pretty good, but make the fingers more jagged. I don't know how to explain this, really, but... The knuckles should be more visible, I suppose. Also, when your fingers are curled in like that, it's actually a really clenched fist. Try maybe putting her thumb on the outside of her hand, and her fingers pressed flat against her palm, instead of curling in. It'll look less stressed.

Her knee that's bent is slightly too skinny.

I think you should make her tail a tiny bit lower. Cat's tails attach at the base of the spine, and judging by what I can see, that would be a tiny bit lower.

Leg is pretty good, though you should make the front part curve in just the tiniest bit more. Too much and it'll look odd, so don't go overboard! Also, the ankle - it looks a bit disjointed. Make it curve into the foot more. Also, that bump on our ankle - just because there is a ribbon around her ankle doesn't mean it's not visible. Just a slight outwards curve!

Her left thumb - has to be a tiny bit longer. I'm nitpicking here, but everything counts! xD

There was something else...

Oh! This isn't about the anatomy or proportions, but the skirt! Oh, the skirt! It's facing directly towards us, while the rest of the body is tilted! What is this!? AND! There's no bend where the knee is! It's evidently far enough forward that it should be seen in the wrinkles of the skirt, yet none are visible!

...And that should be all.

Hope I somewhat helped. o_o

*Amai--Kiss May 17, 2012 Hobbyist Digital Artist

I'll just reply to this part in general. XD

Thank you very much for the critique. ; o ;
I'll try to fix some of the things. XD But I'll keep them all in mind for the next drawings.

~Nekoseznya May 17, 2012 Hobbyist Traditional Artist

I'm too lazy to write a proper critique, but here are a few things -

For the girl on the left:
First off, her right (our left) hand should be a little lower. And even if it is still facing directly towards you, I modeled my arm in the mirror doing the same position - you'd be able to see a little of her elbow facing in. Or, what you could do instead, is move the arm a little out or in, then you could show a different part of her arm that looks less awkward.

Also, her arm that's facing out, when you put your arm in that position, it feels a bit... I dunno - your spinal plates kinda move into an odd position.

Just feels off.

Another thing - stop drawing pigeon feet! xD I realize it's a cute position, but it's a rather awkward one to stand in, and the way you draw your feet always have them going up. Very hard to balance like that. I know drawing feet facing straight towards you is hard, but that's what you're trying to fix~

Both her arms need to be a bit longer. Well, I dunno about the one facing towards us, but the one on our right should be a bit longer. Our arms reach down a bit past mid thigh, not directly mid thigh. Think of it more like they're slightly above the knee.

Um, her head should be bigger or her hands smaller.

I think hands smaller, because she's about 6.5 heads now, so.

Oh! Fun fact! Did you know that your foot is as long as your forearm? So fix that!

Also, her arm - you can see the elbow, there should also be a teensy marker on the top, too. Very subtle, though.

...I've already written more than I intended.

Next girl!

Who looks like Ami!

Um, something about the neck is bothering me. Not quite sure what. Maybe it's too short when before they were too long? Or maybe I'm hallucinating. Who knows?

...I'll post the rest in a separate comment, this is really long.

!LightS0nata May 17, 2012 Student General Artist

Bianca♥♥♥and Ami♥♥♥ Beautiful <3

*Amai--Kiss May 17, 2012 Hobbyist Digital Artist

Yup <3

Thank you!

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